昭通2021名师助考丨运用多样句式结构提升作文档次

时间：2022-12-07

而今天我将着手从句式来提升作文的档次

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作文一直都是学生和老师最头疼的问题，因为要写出高分作文，除了保证内容完整外，还要学会运用恰当的高级词汇、句式以及过渡语。而今天我将着手从句式来提升作文的档次。书面表达中出现过多的简单句会给人单调乏味之感，句子与句子之间的关系也会显得松散；而文中过多出现复合句又显得繁琐，读起来费劲，如何掌握这个度才是关键。一篇优秀的作文要注意适当运用一些高级语法结构，比如强调句、倒装句、省略句、各类从句、非谓语动词、with的复合结构和独立主格结构等，这样可以使文章语言丰富，表达效果更加鲜明。

一、运用三大从句，提升表达

高中阶段学生已深入学习过三大从句即定语从句、名词性从句和状语从句，但还是有部分学生不知如何恰当地运用在自己的作文中。

1、运用定语从句，让句子更饱满

如：学校开设了各种各样的课外活动，这些活动丰富了我们的学习生活。

Our school have offered various after-class activities and these activities enriched our school life.

升级为：Our school have offered various after-class activities，which enriched our school life.

这样把简单句变成从句，便会使得句子更流畅，饱满。

2.恰当运用名词性从句，让句子内容更明了，清楚

恰当的使用名词性从句除了能让句子内容更明了之外，有时还可以达到强调的效果。比如这次3+3+3的联考作文：

李白的诗给我留下了深刻的印象。

I was deeply impressed by Li Bai"s poems.

可升级为：What impressed me most are Li Bai"s poems.

这样既可以体现你的语法功底，还可以达到一种强调，从而体现出他才是你最爱的诗人。

3、运用状语从句，让句子逻辑更清晰

有的同学有时会觉得状语从句在高考作文中使用偏简单了，但是有的时候我们就是需要这些简单一点的东西来让我们的句子乃至篇章逻辑清晰明。有时复杂的长难句是没法达到这样的效果的！

如：无论这项工作多么艰巨，我都会尽力完成的。

The job/work is very tough. But I"ll try my best to finish it.

升级为：Tough/As tough the job/work is, I"ll spare no effort to accomplish it.

适当运用状语从句便可让前后逻辑清晰明了。

二、活用非谓语、with的复合结构和独立主格结构，精简句子，彰显英语水平

1、若主语相同的情况下就把简单句整合成非谓语，如：I have taken part in an English program. It benefited me a lot. 升级为：I have taken part in an English program, benefiting me a lot.

2、若简单句或从句的主语不相同的情况下，我们可以把句子转换成with 的复合结构或者独立主格结构。如：

Our life has greatly changed, since the Internet and 5Gcell phones became more and more common.

升级为：With the Internet and 5G cell phones becoming more and more common, our life has changed greatly.

As spring comes, seeds come out and a variety of beautiful flowers bloom.

升级为：Spring coming, seeds come out and a variety of beautiful flowers bloom.

三、套用特殊句式结构

若高考作文中能适量增加特殊句式，便会给改卷的老师眼前一亮的效果。而高中我们学习了强调句、倒装句、虚拟语气、省略句和感叹句等。掌握每种句式结构，创作中套用结构，必会达到增分的效果。

1、使用强调句, 突出需陈述事物的重要性。如3+3+3联考中陈述你最爱的古代诗人中就可以套用这个句式来突出自己的最爱，It is Li Bai"s poems that impress me most.

Through the activity, we realized science plays an important role in our life.

可升级为：It was through the activity that we realized science plays an important role in our life.

2、运用倒装句，表示强调

改了多次作文发现有很多考生在写信件的第一段开头常用的句式结构有：Hardly......when....; Scarcely...... when......; Not only...... , but also.....等这些倒装结构。除了常用的，我们还可以增加：Not until......; Not/ Hardly/Seldom........; Neither......, nor......；Only+状语构成的倒装等。如：

We began our voluntary work when we arrived at the museum.

升级为：Hardly had we arrived at the museum when we began our voluntary work.

I am outgoing and energetic.

升级为：Not only am I outgoing but also I am energetic.

If I pay full attention to my study, I can make some progress.

升级为：Only if I pay full attention to my study, I can make some progress.

3、常用省略结构。使得句子简练有高度。

一般情况下，能写成从句就不要简单句，能把从句写成分词结构就不要采用从句。当然，这不是说全篇都得用长难句，而是在逻辑，句子与句子衔接恰当的前提下，尽量使用高中所学的句式结构，必然可以增加文章的亮点。如：

If necessary, we should take measures to stop it.

Having failed many times, I was really terrified of that.

I was impressed by a book written by Wu Chengen.

灵活运用状语从句和定语从句的省略，必然会让你的作文更加吸睛。从而能达到自己满意的分数。

下面我们来看看这篇作文，如何让自己的作文在原有的基础上进行修改后能让自己的作文提升档次。(这是省统测的学生作文）

I"m Li Hua who is from class 1. I"m writing this letter whose purpose is that I desire to get permission to be an envoy.

One of my advantages to be a little envoy of cultural exchange is my excellent oral English grade, which is important to be envoys. However, enthusiasm in our Chinese culture and being eager to spread it are the most important reasons that I"m writing to you.

This chance is also a way to reach my aim that it can promote my communication ability and builds my confidence to become a better people to make my dream come true. I believe it will succeeds as long as we try our best to do it.

Please call 010-2233456 to contact me. I"m looking forward to getting your permission.

首先这篇作文把写作要求的点基本写了，当然我已经把考生本身的一些语法错误做了修改了。在最基础的修改上，如何进一步的修改来进一步提升作文的档次和得分呢？

1、加入适量高级词汇或短语。

2、采用恰当的过渡词，让文章更加流畅。

3、修改个别句式来丰富句式结构，使文章更加精彩。

I"m Li Hua from class 1. I"m writing this letter with the purpose to get the permit to be an envoy.

To begin with, my excellent oral English gives me an added advantage, which is badly needed to be a little envoy of this cultural exchange. Undoubtedly, I have a great passion for Chinese culture, making me eager to spread it to others so that they can get insight into China. Last but most importantly, I consider it as a rare opportunity to promote my communication ability. In the meanwhile, I"m convinced that it will definitely build my confidence, ensuring me to fulfill my dream. Given me the chance, I will spare no effort to meet it up to your expectations..

If you take me into account, please contact me by 010-2233456. I"m looking forward to your reply at your earliest convenience.

这是修改后的作文，我不敢保证这篇作文一定能得很高的分，但至少比之前的档次高了很多。除了合理恰当选用多样的句式结构来增加文章的亮点外，课外要不断积累课本以及自己平时在阅读中所见到的优秀单词、短语和句子，从而让自己不局限于课本学习的内容，扩宽自己的知识面，让自己的表达更加流畅和地道。

以上是我自己对高考作文的一点拙见，有不足之处，望大家谅解。

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